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    Ace Archard

    Ace
    Ace

    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

    Posts : 4
    Join date : 2015-09-07
    Age : 25

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    Post by Ace Mon Sep 07, 2015 9:46 pm

    Name: Ace Archard
    Nickname: n/a
    Age:  17 (pre plot time skip), 20(post personal plot time skip)
    Species: Blessed Human
    Species Ability/Perk: Blessed by a Goddess: Being blessed by the Goddess of the Moon Luna from birth all of his attacks can become embedded with the holy element if he wants it too as he is conscious of this ability, the blessing thus gives him a natural resistance to charms such as a siren song or a sleeping spell; the restance to these charms is 15% at D rank and increases an extra 15% per rank up. However with each extra 15% that increases his restance to these charms it also hinders his ability to use and preform charm spells.
    Special/Unique Characteristics: The iris of his eyes glow faintly due to his magic. They get brighter as his magic gets stronger, at A rank he would need to wear sunglasses to dim the light comming from them.

    Character Depth:
    Personality:

    Like:

    Dislikes:
    Fears:
    Motivations/Goals:

    Appearance:
    Hair: Golden Blonde
    Eyes: Amethyst purple
    Skin Tone: average Caucasian
    Height: Pre Personal Time-skip: 5'10, Post Personal Time-skip: 6 feet tall
    Weight: Post Personal Time-skip: 62 kilograms, Post Personal Time-skip: 64 kilograms
    Overall Appearances: Arc's body build is at it's peak condition which gives him an athletic build and he has light blonde hair spiking downwards in all directions and a set of purple eyes. Before his personal plot timeskip He can be seen wearing a gray-blue gakuran and keeps only one button in place, the rest are unbuttoned to reveal a yellow undershirt beneath the uniform. Arc also wears pants with the same color and a pair of tennis shoes with black, white and gold tones and also wears his headphones at almost all time.
    After his personal timeskip he is a often seen wearing what most people would consider a bartender suit and blue sunglasses.


    Other:
    Rank: D
    Guild: Fairy Tail
    Guild Tattoo his guild mark is on the extensor digiti minimi sector of his right arm purple in color.


    Last edited by Ace on Mon Sep 28, 2015 5:35 am; edited 1 time in total
    Kosovo Misogi
    Kosovo Misogi

    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

    Posts : 55
    Join date : 2015-06-03

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    Post by Kosovo Misogi Tue Sep 08, 2015 8:14 pm

    Bump please when finished
    Ace
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    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

    Posts : 4
    Join date : 2015-09-07
    Age : 25

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    Post by Ace Fri Sep 25, 2015 3:27 pm

    Bump
    Kosovo Misogi
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    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

    Posts : 55
    Join date : 2015-06-03

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    Post by Kosovo Misogi Sat Sep 26, 2015 1:43 pm

    Edits in RED.

    Ace wrote:Name: Ace Archard
    Nickname: n/a
    Age:  17 (pre plot time skip), 20(post personal plot time skip)
    Species: Blessed Human
    Species Ability/Perk: Blessed by a Goddess: Being blessed by the Goddess of the Moon Luna from birth all of his attacks can become embedded with the holy element if he wants it too, the blessing also gave him a natural resistance to charms such as a siren song or a sleeping spell. Give a better explanation of your resistance. Does it grant 'immunity' or does it cause them to have a different effect or a lesser effect (by how much and what charm or spell would go over this resistance and have full effect). Also to balance the resistance, the effects of 2 ranks above you will still work. example: Your D rank, B and above will still work.
    Special/Unique Characteristics: The iris of his eyes glow faintly due to his magic. They get brighter as his magic gets stronger, at A rank he would need to wear sunglasses to dim the light comming from them.

    Character Depth:
    Personality:

    Like:

    Dislikes:
    Fears:
    Motivations/Goals:

    Appearance:
    Hair: Golden Blonde
    Eyes: Amethyst purple
    Skin Tone: average Caucasian
    Height: Pre Personal Time-skip: 5'10, Post Personal Time-skip: 6 feet tall
    Weight: Post Personal Time-skip: 62 kilograms, Post Personal Time-skip: 64 kilograms
    Overall Appearances: Arc's body build is at it's peak condition which gives him an athletic build and he has light blonde hair spiking downwards in all directions and a set of purple eyes. Before his personal plot timeskip He can be seen wearing a gray-blue gakuran and keeps only one button in place, the rest are unbuttoned to reveal a yellow undershirt beneath the uniform. Arc also wears pants with the same color and a pair of tennis shoes with black, white and gold tones and also wears his headphones at almost all time.
    After his personal timeskip he is a often seen wearing what most people would consider a bartender suit and blue sunglasses.


    Other:
    Rank: D
    Guild: Fairy Tail
    Guild Tattoo his guild mark is on the extensor digiti minimi sector of his right arm purple in color.
    Ace
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    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

    Posts : 4
    Join date : 2015-09-07
    Age : 25

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    Post by Ace Mon Sep 28, 2015 5:37 am

    bump
    Kosovo Misogi
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    Ace Archard ODFYPdI

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    Join date : 2015-06-03

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    Post by Kosovo Misogi Mon Oct 05, 2015 10:22 pm

    Ace Archard Nrtootz
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    Join date : 2015-03-08

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    Post by Bacon Tue Oct 06, 2015 7:49 pm

    I'll be needing a downfall for your perk seeing as the percentage is high when stacked. Also, please explain more on 'if he wants to.' Bump when done ^-^
    Amaterasu
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    Join date : 2015-09-16

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    Post by Amaterasu Sun Oct 11, 2015 4:08 pm

    This application has a 48hr timer now of which means the user has 48hrs to make the edits onto this application if it has not been finished in 48hrs this topic will be moved to the archives
    Krow
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    Ace Archard N51AM3g

    Posts : 324
    Join date : 2015-03-13

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    Post by Krow Sun Oct 18, 2015 8:24 pm

    Hello Ace, I will be discussing with you on your app. Anything that is out of place or needs editing will be pointed out. Hope that you understand that there will be no biased grading on this application, any and all issues dealt with on this app is strictly based on the rules of this site. Now then without further adieu, your over all assessment.

    Species and Perks/Abilities:
    Blessed by a Goddess:
    I like this ability, it has a lot of fine details to it, however, 15% is too high. Make it 5% with a 5% bump per rank up. This will also need a Duration and Cool-down in terms of its use to boost spells with a holy element.
    Special Unique Characteristics:
    Spoiler:
    This looks good as is.
    Personality:
    Spoiler:

    I like the personality, similar to my own, one thing I didn't really like is that certain parts of the Pre Personal Plot Time-Skip are literally taken word for word from Natsu Dragneel's personality on the Fairy Tail wikia. The Likes, Dislikes, Fear, Motivations section looks good aside from some grammatical mishaps, but nothing there really needs major improvement.
    Appearance:
    Spoiler:
    This all looks good to go.
    Other:
    Spoiler:
    This looks good, save for the lack of capitalization at the beginning of a sentence. I like that you got all technical with the guild marks location.
    Overall Opinion:
    My overall opinion of this application, is that it is very well done, while I disliked a few things, they aren't really cause for a high degree of concern. I'd just like to see you go through and fix all of the grammatical errors. My rating it a 7 out of 10. Anyways, fix the grammar issues and I'll approve it for you.
    Selenia
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    Posts : 760
    Join date : 2015-10-11
    Age : 29

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    Post by Selenia Sat Nov 28, 2015 12:34 pm

    Bumping. If no response is made to this app within a week, app will be archived, thanks!

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