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    Post by ReikoBrown Thu Oct 15, 2015 8:39 pm

    Hiyori Kazuki
    Hin
    14
    December 17th
    Human
    D
    Lawful Good
    Female


    Species Ability/Perk
    N/A

    Special Unique Characteristics
    N/A

    Character Depth
    Personality: Hiyori is a clumsy, timid, thoughtful, kind, and honest girl who always speaks in a polite tone. She is a nurturing sort of person, always looking out for others and willing to assist them in any way that she can. As stated by her mother, Hiyorii's greatest gift is her warm hospitality as her actions are always intended to make someone feel better. Her kindness could move even the coldest of hearts. Those who had never felt any positive emotions in their entire lives could smile due to Hiyori's initial kindness. Her main aspiration in life is to get her mother back, as she was stolen and taken away from their home. Because she highly idolized her mother and the work setting she was in, this eventually created her "hospitality" mentality. Hiyori's mother taught her to think of someone special to her whenever she does anything and Hiyori firmly believes that by doing so, she can solve a lot of problems with simply being kind. Hiyori is open to communication with other, but she tends to get a bit flustered when someone reaches out to her. Hiyori can be characterized as shy, thoughtful, serene, kind, and very polite, as noted from her always addressing people with proper honourifics. She is also very gentle, a trait that many Rune Knights consider a flaw, and dislikes competing. She knows that if she were to be compared to someone else, the other person would be chosen. She is known to be incredibly empathetic, as she always feels sad whenever someone else is stressed, worried, or just in a bad mood.

    Although Hiyori is a capable mage, she does not fare well under pressure because she has stage fright. Because she is intimidated very easily, she makes simple mistakes when she's in battle, causing many of her guildmates to see her as a weak mage. She is quick to panic when something goes awry and tends to over think situations when under pressure or stress, such as repeatedly packing and unpacking a suitcase to make sure she packed something, even though she did not need to pack a suitcase in the first place. She was also rather cautious, preferring to choose her words and actions carefully to avoid unwanted consequences and attention. She has a habit of tracing the kanji for "person" ("人") on her hand then motioning, as if to eat it, whenever she is stressed. When given orders, she tries to follow them to the best of her abilities, though sometimes she may fail. As a leader, she wouldn't fare that well either. She'd get nervous because of all of the pressure put on her by the task, and begin writing on her hand again, as it helps her cope with stress. She's make rushed or hurried decisions due to the need of action, and what ever task she may have had would most likely end up failing. She isn't good with pressure, so being in a position where all of the pressure was on her would definitely have bad results. When forced into a position where physical altercation was necessary, she'd be shaken up at first, but she eventually begins to fight. When she herself is getting hurt, she begins to realize that the person has no mercy and is hurting her purposely, and she feels that people like that don't deserve to be free.

    Likes: (3 minimum)
    ‌•Cooking. Cooking is another thing that helps her cope with stress.
    ‌•Knitting. Knitting had always been a hobby that she enjoyed
    ‌•Singing. She's always enjoyed singing

    Dislikes: (3 minimum)
    ‌•Competing. She doesn't like being compared to other people.
    ‌•Attention. She has stage fright, so lots of attention would frighten her.
    ‌•Being mean. She doesn't like being mean, even if the situation calls for it, as it may make the other person feel bad.
    ‌•Fighting. Though she is a capable mage, she doesn't really enjoy hurting people.

    Fears: (3 minimum)
    •Dying without seeing her mother again. The main thing she wants out of life is to see her mothers smiling face again.
    ‌•Spiders. She thinks that they're creepy.
    ‌•Ghosts. For the obvious reasons. They're basically wandering dead people, and that scares her.
    Motivations/Goals: (3 minimum)
    ‌•Pictures of her mother. They motivate her to work even harder to find her
    ‌•Thieves. They remind her of how her mother was taken, motivating her to work harder to find her.
    ‌•Smiles. They motivate her to protect them.


    Appearance
    Hair: Dark blue-purple
    Eyes: Blue
    Skin Tone: Pale
    Height: 5'02"
    Weight: 98 lbs
    Overall Appearances: She has cyan-colored eyes and has a golden colored right eye, over which she wears an eyepatch. Her hair is dark blue-purple and is tied with a yellow ribbon. She wears a ruffled tartan skirt, a black blazer with a white collared shirt and a red tie, and loafers.


    Other

    Guild: Arcana Force
    Guild Tattoo: Left hip





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    Post by ReikoBrown Thu Oct 15, 2015 8:42 pm

    Bump
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    Post by Fūjin Fri Oct 16, 2015 11:14 pm

    Hi there I am Fujin and I'll be grading your app today, so lets work together taking this step by step Onion 25

    So first off it seems like you accidently edited the code in the template as you wrote your Species Ability/Perk where it is suppose to read SPECIES ABILITY/PERK and then, writing none where you were supposed to write your Species Ability/Perk. While on that note I need to to elaborate how your character got Heightened Intelligence from her mother. Was her mother cursed or blessed that was passed down from mother to child or is it a genetic mutation in their family's genetic code? You will also need to explain how this effects your character as a whole as well as in combat.

    Going on from there you have written None twice in the Special Unique Characteristics, while its fine for your character not to have any special or unique characteristics you wrote none where the title of that section is supposed to be so that needs to be fixed.

    so you get an idea of what it is suppose to look like I'll link the character template >>here<<

    Apart from that your personality, likes and dislikes are all fine. You just need to state what color your character's hair is.
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    Post by ReikoBrown Sat Oct 17, 2015 6:46 pm

    Bump ;D
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    Post by Fūjin Sat Oct 17, 2015 9:03 pm

    Thank you for working with me on this ^^

    So your Species Ability/Perk its better than it was before but I am afriad its too vauge for me to approve, could you go into detail on how your character's mother obtained her hightened intelligence, what you mean by analyzing an situation and make the best possible outcome while saying how often in a thread it can be used plus if it has any draw backs.

    As for your Special Unique Characteristics could you give a little bit more infomation about this golden eye, as in why and how you have it?

    Okay once this is done please bump it once again :)
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    Post by ReikoBrown Sat Oct 17, 2015 9:16 pm

    Bump ;o
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    Post by Fūjin Sat Oct 17, 2015 9:33 pm

    Okay round three here we go!! Onio 19

    So your Species Ability/Perk its even better than last time, but I am afriad its too vauge as in how its used. As in when you say "analyze and situation and make the best possible outcome" could you go into detail on how it helps you make the best possible outcome? What infomation do you obtain from this ability? Does it let you figure single weakness of the target's magic or spell they last used? Or does it tell you one of your oppnants fears? I need more infomation.

    As for your Special Unique Characteristics I need you to make sure you realise that the characteristics are completely cosmetic.

    Okay once this is done please bump it once again, you are doing awesome :)
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    Post by ReikoBrown Sun Oct 18, 2015 2:39 pm

    I went more in depth, hope it's enough ^^ I also just removed the special characteristic since it ahs to be cosmetic o-o BUMP
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    Post by Fūjin Sun Oct 18, 2015 6:44 pm

    I want to start round 4 of your grading with saying thank you for giving me more information on your Species Ability/Perk as it helps me grade it fairly, even though the explatnation for this ability make sense I feel as if its too over powered for a Species Ability or Perk. You see knowing what your oppnant does next before they do it is god modding when used on other players, If it was onaly able to be used on non boss/event npcs i may be inclinded to let it slide however that is not the case. Also for ability like this it definately needs to have a draw back.

    Okay thats all I have to say this time, so bump when ready and lets keep working on this to make it the best we can ^^
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    Post by ReikoBrown Sun Oct 18, 2015 8:58 pm

    Well, I created a new one, so bump
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    Post by Fūjin Thu Oct 22, 2015 10:58 pm

    Unfortunately, this perk would take up spell slot and is related to magic. So I need to ask you to make a new ability.
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    Post by ReikoBrown Fri Oct 23, 2015 10:10 am

    K, so I just went with no ability.
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    Post by Fūjin Fri Oct 23, 2015 7:13 pm

    Oh okay well in that case you have your first approvel. Onion 16
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    Post by ReikoBrown Tue Oct 27, 2015 8:33 pm

    -screams joyfully-
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    Post by Selenia Tue Oct 27, 2015 9:57 pm

    Hello, I'm Selenia and I'll be grading your app today.

    Just a few minor edits and I can get you on your way to being approved :D

    First off, for your character's allegiance, "light" is a bit too broad. Alignment usually refers to Lawful, Neutral, and Chaotic, depending on your character. Then, you add Good, Neutral, or Evil depending on their affiliation. So for a purely neutral character, you would say Neutral Neutral (or, more commonly, True Neutral). If you were trying to make a totally, morally good character, you would probably go with Lawful Good. You can find more information by searching Lawful Good or any other combination. Lawful would mean they follow the law (in this case, the Magic Council most likely), Neutral would mean they don't really care about the law either way, not going out of their way to abide by or break it, while Chaotic means they break the law without a care in the world, and sometimes even intend to. Good, Neutral, and Evil should be pretty obvious.

    Second is your personality. You didn't include anything that clearly shows how Hiyori is in combat. Please add a few sentences about this to give a good idea of how she would act during a battle. I know you said she doesn't like fighting, so maybe you could elaborate on this. The more information you give, the better c:

    Finally, just a minor note that Blue Pegasus will become Arcana Force, if you want to change that. Otherwise, everything looks good! Please edit and bump to let me know, and I'll get back to you ASAP ^^
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    Post by ReikoBrown Wed Nov 04, 2015 8:03 pm

    Bump c:
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    Post by Selenia Mon Nov 16, 2015 10:21 pm

    Hey, sorry for taking so long, I extremely apologize for the wait. All that needs to be done is for the guild to be changed to Rusty Hearts (which is what it's now called... sorry xD) and to give your guild mark a color. Once those edits are made, bump and let me know and I'll approve you!
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    Post by Selenia Sat Nov 28, 2015 12:40 pm

    Bumping. If no response is made to this app within a week, app will be archived, thanks!

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